Wednesday, 10 September 2014

Show don't tell


WILF
I will begin by describing what the characters body felt like.
I will describe what they were thinking
I will leave the audience hanging


She had purple lips, her hands were frozen as if she was a statue. She made a hiss every time she talked and had goosebumps everywhere. She tucked her body into a little ball. Her eyes were big as a plate, her lips were zipped and starting to freeze. She was fidgety, imagining what will happen next….

He was ready to pull a fist, tears started pouring out of his eyes. He stared at the person imagining how he would get his revenge for what he did to him….

Her hands were shaking, she was silent and her heart was pumping like its never pumped before. Her hands were quivering and her talking wasn't really good at all. She began to imagine what could happen to her….

Can you guess what emotional he or her is having?

3 comments:

  1. The 1st emotion is cold or scared, the 2nd one is angry but I can't figure out the last one

    From Daniel

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  2. Hi Te Atawhetu, I like the way you used descriptive words you really left me hanging to at the end and the purplish color is a little hard to see. But what are the emotions that she is feeling?

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  3. I love your ataahua colours .I like your bold lettering.

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